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| ''he must have been a good stepfather to Hala and Hind, for they remained unswervingly loyal to him.''
| ''he must have been a good stepfather to Hala and Hind, for they remained unswervingly loyal to him.''
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| (avoid)
| This sentence is drawing conclusions that are not present in the original text.
| This sentence is drawing conclusions that are not present in the original text. Stepchildren remaining loyal could equally suggest that Muhammad was a strict and uncaring disciplinarian. But since neither conclusion is supported by facts, commenting on them should be avoided.
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| ''Juwayriya was sweet-natured, charming and as alluringly beautiful as a fairy; men became infatuated with her at first sight.''
| ''Juwayriya was sweet-natured, charming and as alluringly beautiful as a fairy; men became infatuated with her at first sight.''
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